“What Lecia said to Daddy that night stays with me, for she was suddenly issuing orders again, first for the operator to put us through, then to Daddy absent so long I faltered conjuring his face. Here’s exactly what Lecia said: “Daddy, you need to get us two airplane tickets back down there from Denver.” She didn’t ask, there was no maybe threaded through her voice, no sliver of doubt. […] The receiver was warm on my ear. Daddy wanted to know one thing: “You ‘bout ready to come home, Pokey?”” (256, 257).
In this image, Lecia "issuing orders again," "she didn't ask, there was no maybe," Lecia's stern actions and Karr's choice of words lets the reader know just what it would have been like to be on the other end of the phone as if you were Daddy. Also, Lecia's dictating and lack of politeness portrays a feeling of urgency for the girls to meet back up with Daddy. Daddy even lets Mary know that he too is feeling the separation, by asking "You 'bout ready to come home, Pokey?" This passage gives the reader the first true feeling of the Fathers absence.
Another image where Mary portrays her strong relationship with her father is in the scene where Mary has returned home from College and Daddy is cutting her steak. "Still, on my first visit home from college, he not only spooned my plate high, but actually used his pocketknife to saw my T-bone into a grid of tiny bites."(278).
This is a very colorful image that recaptures Mary and her fathers relationship. After all these years, Mary is now all grown up and her father still loves and even babies her. Though this may seem a bit strange being that karr is all grown up, it gives me a perfect picture of the fathers smiling face as he slops food onto her plate, and cuts up her T-bone steak. Karr also realizes that this kind gesture is ridiculous, but she lets Daddy go on with it because she knows it feeds Daddy satisfaction.
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ReplyDeleteIf one can just tell that Daddy is more charismatic from reading the text, then it may not be something you can argue about. We all will agree, no?
If your thesis is the first sentence, you'll end up counting the times Karr describes her mother as opposed to other characters to prove that she's described more vividly. Maybe you're looking for a word other than vividly. And maybe you want to look closely at your supporting passages to re-evaluate what you really mean to say in the thesis.
Keep working.
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ReplyDeleteFor the thesis, I'm not entirely sure if you want to just focus on the Mother when you only mentioned one sentence about the Father before diving into the writing. I don't get the tie of the Mother being neglectful which intensified why Mary went into such great detail about her. It flowed well but may need to watch out about summarizing too much, but I don't think it's that much of a problem because I think it worked for you. The way you ended in the last paragraph, doesn't really relate to Mother and Father image at all so I might want to reword the last sentence to conclude it better.
The first paragraph I would also, if you use it like that, to be much more in depth on what happened at the bar and so on. That probably relates somewhat to the summary part, so watch out. The quote: "It was Hector the, barkeep from the cowboy joint" (197) is actually "It was Hector, the barkeep from the cowboy joint," just so you know. I know I forgot this too, but to make sure to give the title of the memoir because I forgot to do that too. And of course to put the page numbers before the period. Just keep working at it!
Sincerely,
Rebecca
You're thesis isn't quite clear because you start the intro paragraph off by saying Karr describes her Mother most, but your then you say, "From reading the text, one can just tell that Mary feels more attached to her father because he is more charismatic.". Just clear that up by reworking that intro paragraph. You talk about both topics, Mary's mother, and her father, I think if you picked one over the other, which ever has more support. Also, if you decide to use the one about the father, try to re-word your "thesis", don't say "one can just tell", try something like "Karr shows us that Mary feels more attached to her father...".
ReplyDeleteThe first quote has a mistake, the comma should be after Hector, not the.
The first image really has nothing to do with either of your two thesis'.
There is no real conclusion.
All of your quotes need to be introduced. They just pop up at you. and you need to talk about the quotes, not just using them as an image. analyze them, how do they support your thesis? What are you trying to tell us with these quotes?